O that time is the foulest criminal of all.
Time, whom is the rankest rogue, man's most fearsome foe.
He is far greedier than mortal man,
His only true possession being an insatiable hunger.
Hunger not for our objects, but for that which we grip with white knuckled hands,
That which continues to slip and slide,
As relenting as the tide.
Time, that lets us live, while robbing us of life.
That's really roughly written, so I know I'll probably read it tomorrow and find a million corrections to make. But it kinda sums up my feelings on the fact that I'm 16, and already I feel as though I'm entering a mid life crisis! I lay awake at night fearful of the fact that time is constantly passing, that years are slipping by faster and faster, that I am helpless to stop it, and of that fact that one day, I will have no time left. None at all.
So I want to do something really worthwhile with my life! I'm just not sure what yet.
Time, whom is the rankest rogue, man's most fearsome foe.
He is far greedier than mortal man,
His only true possession being an insatiable hunger.
Hunger not for our objects, but for that which we grip with white knuckled hands,
That which continues to slip and slide,
As relenting as the tide.
Time, that lets us live, while robbing us of life.
That's really roughly written, so I know I'll probably read it tomorrow and find a million corrections to make. But it kinda sums up my feelings on the fact that I'm 16, and already I feel as though I'm entering a mid life crisis! I lay awake at night fearful of the fact that time is constantly passing, that years are slipping by faster and faster, that I am helpless to stop it, and of that fact that one day, I will have no time left. None at all.
So I want to do something really worthwhile with my life! I'm just not sure what yet.
9 comments:
I'm so happy that you want to try the cleanse!! try the brand renew life, they have a lot of products, but i would reccomend firstcleanse. i love your poem about time. ive shared the same feelings as you and i love that youve caught yourself. let me know how your cleanse goes!
Hey, nice poetry. Do post up more.
I remember the same feelings at 16.
Slow down a little and enjoy the ride. I can tell you at 36 I no longer wear a watch and I'm very selective about where my time is spent. It is well spent.
Do NOT stop writing. You are clearly gifted.
Many of us have spent a very long time trying to figure out what it is we should do with our lives..
Even more still are currently searching..
Good luck and keep writing..
I enjoyed that!
It feels good to write those kinds of feelings out. Keep it up! You may need to write it, and we may need to hear/read it.
Peyton-
I was very moved by the rough draft of your poem. It MAY need a little polishing [don't be too quick to rush to judgement on that], but from someone of your age, it shows great insight and wisdom.
Don't worry about not knowing what you want to do. I'm three times your age, and sometimes I wish I'd given the question a little more thought.(You may feel that way when you get to be that age. Then again, you may not...) The point is, don't rush. And, if you get to a point in your life when you're not happy with what you're doing, don't be afraid to try something else. Life is too short to be doing something you don't like.
Thanks for visiting my blog. Hope it gets to be as good as yours someday...
We all get that feeling sometimes. I'm 25 and I feel it all the time. Not knowing exactly where I want to be or what I want to be doing. Just remember to remind yourself that we have no control over passing time so there is no point in worrying...you are young and clearly gifted. Rest easy knowing you don't have to have it all figured out right now...just enjoy everyday you are given and keep writing..
I work in Manhattan, live in Queens so yes, I really am doing the NYC thing!! I've always wanted to go to Australia...I guess it's the "grass is always greener" syndrome!!
I understand your emotions exactly! I feel that often; the feeling that life will be gone too soon leaving us with unfinished business... But I suppose it's normal. I've been told it's a sign of maturity, to realize that life isn't just one big party to be wasted away. Keep writing; you have a thought-provoking way with words. Advice from one writer to another: never stop writing, but always be open to criticism, even if it's only from yourself! Try polishing up on poetry and other things a couple days after you've written it; you'll have a fresh perspective on it. Just be sure not to stray from your original emotion/idea.
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